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 Cana the Fennekin

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Evana

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PostSubject: Cana the Fennekin   Cana the Fennekin EmptySat Sep 26, 2015 7:42 pm

» Name: Cana
» Sex: Female
» Gender: Female
» Species: #653 Fennekin
» Affiliation: Traveler

» Level: 14
» Energy: 28
» Ability: Blaze
» Moves:
-Scratch (lvl1)
-Flame Charge (lvl 14)
-Ember (lvl 5)
-Heat Wave (Egg move)

» Natural Feats:
-Ear Heater: She can vent hot air from her ears up to temperatures of 390 °F and warmer. This is more used for intimidation than for attacking. Getting too close could still get you burned.

» Personality:
Cana is pretty shy and doesn't trust others easily. When meeting new people she normally would not talk to them unless they talk to her first. When someone she doesn't know or trust enough yet starts to ask her personal questions, she gets really uncomfortable and either tries to change the subject or get away. She is normally very hesitant about helping strangers but she loves helping friends and she also loves to help children.
Cana can get pretty emotional and sensitive if she gets insulted or is unable to do something. When something is bothering her, she tends to be pretty quiet and lost in thoughts, making her unable to concentrate on what she is doing or what she has to do. She might be hesitant about telling others what is wrong at first but with enough patience her friends should be able to persuade her.

» Likes:
Cana loves music. She also loves to sing. Even if nobody would want to listen. It was one of the few ways to calm herself down when provoked or sad. It often makes her feel better.

Cana is fascinated with fire. She pretty much loves playing with fire. In the past she did burn down a few things so she learned to be more careful.

Rain. Even though she is a fire pokemon, Cana loves the rain. The sound always calms her down and it feels pretty nice on her body when it doesn’t rain too much. It still isn’t good for her fire attacks though.

Stories. She often read those to her siblings and she loved them. Especially stories about great adventures and tales of love are her favorites.

Children. Always having to take care of her younger siblings she really grew fond of children.

» Dislikes:
Being ordered around. Cana really hates it when others do that. It angers her pretty often and it is one of the ways to provoke her.

Talking about her past. She believes the past is irrelevant. People don’t need to know about her life before she started traveling. When people ask she will mostly try to change subject.

Using fire moves in forests or burnable buildings. Because she doesn’t want to burn a whole forest down and get pokemon killed.

Socializing. She really hates meeting new people. They often scare her or make her feel uncomfortable. She much rather spends her time alone or with good friends she is comfortable with.

Being stared at in her eyes. For some unexplainable reason it always makes her feel uncomfortable. It makes her feel like they are judging her or like they can see inside her heart that way or the like. She especially avoids people their gaze when lying.

» History:
Cana was born in a big family. Being the oldest, she often had to help take care of her siblings. But her parents took advantage of that and often left her to take care of her siblings alone. In the beginning she didn’t mind but she didn’t have time to go out anymore or play with friends. Because of that, her friends got angry at her and eventually stopped talking to her. Cana was really sad when they kept disappearing out of her life one by one. That was when she started arguing with her parents. She wanted to be able to go out and play again but her parents wanted her to just keep taking care of her siblings. Her parents almost never were home and when they were, they only looked at her younger siblings. They didn’t pay any attention to her. She felt so sad and alone. She didn’t want her siblings to worry so she often hid her feelings and never talked to them about her troubles. But she also didn’t let it show because she didn’t want others to know her pain. As time went on, the arguments kept getting worse and often ended up in fights. She often ended up running outside out of anger. Sometimes she ran outside in the rain. In the beginning she hated it but she eventually came to love it. That was one of the times nobody would be able to see her crying.

During that time she also developed a fascination for fire. She would often put things on fire and just watch the flames dancing around. She never knew why. Maybe because she thought the fire looked so pretty or maybe because of how it just is never still. She always did it in secret. It did end up bad a few times though. She pretty much almost burned down the house twice and part of the forest behind her home got completely burned down. It was a real disaster. Pokemon died in the forest fire. She has been feeling guilty ever since. Her family was really angry at her for that too. Since then she has been a bit scared to burn things down again. Her fascination for fire didn’t change though.

Eventually the fights got out of hand. She refused to do what her parents told her to anymore. Because of that, she got beaten down and her siblings were getting involved too. Cana decided it would be best to leave. When her parents where away again she packed her stuff and left, without saying goodbye to her siblings. Since then she has been traveling around aimlessly. She still has no idea what she wants to do but she will figure that out eventually.

» Other: Nothing I can think of. Except she likes to eat twigs.

Administrator's note: The information below is the progress made by the original RPe. Any prospective adopters may want to look through the threads linked below to see if any are open and the relationships this character had with other before filling out an adoption application.

» Inventory:
Consumables:
-Apple x1
-Pecha Berry x3
-Oran Berry x3
-Sitrus Berry x2
-Green Gummi x1
-Pink Gummi x1
-Purple Gummi x1

Orbs:
-Petrify Orb x1
-Trawl Orb x5
-House Orb x1
-Evasion Orb x1

Seeds:
-Reviver seed x1
-Blast seed x4
-Swift Seed x2
-Heal Seed x2

Throwables:
-Stick x1

Gear and exclusive items:
-Fire Dust x1 (activated)
-Trap Scarf x1 (equipped)
-Persim Band

TM's:
-Hail x1

Others:
-Purple Leaf x1
-Strange Ticket x1

» Page Count:
» Threads:
13: A temporary guardian (Pages: 1)
15: Deep into the marshland (Pages: 0)[/url]
4: A Beautiful Sunset on a Lonely Island (pages: 0)
5: Okay fine, no ninja sneasel. Blame Rose (pages:1)
6: Friend or Foe (Pages: 1)
9: Lost in Pricklemist Hill (pages:1)
10: Many Ways to Climb a Hill (pages:1)
12: Cold Marshlands 2 (pages: 2)
14: Fire doesn't have to ruin the snowscape(Pages: 1)
1: An evening at the pond (pages:1)
2: Round two (pages:12)
3: the reptile and the fox (pages:3)
7: A nice day for adventuring (pages:4)
8: Shadows under the trees (Pages:4)
11: Cold Marshlands (Pages: 3)
15: Egg Hunting (pages: 1)


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PostSubject: Re: Cana the Fennekin   Cana the Fennekin EmptySat Sep 26, 2015 10:25 pm


Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:

1.) PERSONALITY Cana's personality really seems to be all over the place. You tend to be using the trope of "Cold and lonely and rawr when first meeting someone but friendly and kind and ponies when you get to know her," for her. Think about how this character would really react to meeting someone, if she is cold and distant, then when she does become closer to them, I doubt she'd be much more open. More likely she'd still be cold and distant, but not as much as before. Doing a complete 180 however, is a bit absurd.

You also said she's a bit of a, and excuse the pun, hot head once angered, which is another thing that goes against her personality a bit, at least the base "cold and distant" kind.

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Secretaries. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.

As a side note, Coaster approved the natural feat, so that's good.
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PostSubject: Re: Cana the Fennekin   Cana the Fennekin EmptyMon Sep 28, 2015 6:42 pm

I completely redid my personality. I hope this will be better now.
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PostSubject: Re: Cana the Fennekin   Cana the Fennekin EmptyThu Oct 01, 2015 2:45 am

Alright, I'm gonna break down your personality sentence by sentence to highlight the problems.

Cana is pretty shy and doesn't trust others easily. Good
When meeting new people she normally would not talk to them unless they talk to her first. Good
She is able to do some shopping but can still be a bit awkward. What?
It normally takes some time before she starts warming up to others. Good
When someone she doesn't know or trust enough yet starts to ask her personal questions, she gets really uncomfortable and either tries to change the subject or get away. Starting to repeat yourself on her shyness. I would suggest removing the previous "Good" sentence and keeping this one.
She is normally very hesitant about helping strangers but she loves helping friends. Good
She also can't stand by when a child is in trouble. Good, though kinda tacked on.
She wouldn't be able to forgive herself if she did. Perhaps instead of having this and the previous sentence, simply add "and children" to the end of the sentence above these two.
Cana normally doesn't care for others. Why?
Not because she doesn't want to but because she isn't able to. Eh?
It doesn't mean she doesn't try. Eh?
If you would try to explain what it is like to care for someone, she wouldn't be able to understand. Ok you've lost me on the whole "not caring for other's" thing now.
It does make her a bit sad though. But doesn't she not care?
It makes her wonder if she actually has a heart. Pretty sure the helping friends and children thing says "yes" to having a heart.
She doesn't like showing her emotions but sadly for her, she is an open book. How is she an open book? She a cry baby? She speak before she thinks?
She always feels she is bothering others when she would tell them something is bothering her so she crops it up. Yet peeps know something's up cause she's an open book?
When friends ask her what is wrong she will not tell at first but eventually will after some persuading. Tacked on, if she's an open book/easily persuaded by friends, it should be explained right after the sentence you mention her being an open book, not towards the end.
Cana is also pretty over-emotional. Good
She can get really frustrated when she isn't able to do something. Like use a spoon? Or breathe underwater? Is there a boundary where she doesn't care and does or will anything she can't do frustrate her?
Then she can act out her frustrations on others. This a bit more elaboration on the "open book" thing? If so, it might be best to simply tack on the emotional (I wouldn't say over) with the sentence I told you to move. Such as "...easily persuaded as well as being somewhat emotional and sensitive if she is insulted or unable to do something (change something here to whatever specifics you want, though keep it condensed to a few words)."
She does feel guilty when she does though. So does she care about others or not?Cause guilt = caring.
Whenever someone insults her or criticizes her she mostly becomes sad and she might end up crying. Sentence unneeded as I gave an example of what you could do above with the frustration.
She is normally pretty easy to cheer up but she can be feeling bad for a while. This sentence contradicts itself, please just remove it or edit it to better clarify what you mean.

Ok, so the personality has improved, it's just a bit jumbled and stretched out when not needed. If you have any questions, don't hesistate to ask.
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PostSubject: Re: Cana the Fennekin   Cana the Fennekin EmptyThu Oct 01, 2015 10:37 pm

Ok, I changed things like you said. I hope I did it right.
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PostSubject: Re: Cana the Fennekin   Cana the Fennekin EmptySat Oct 03, 2015 1:00 am


Natural Feat approved by Coaster3000

Character has been APPROVED!
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