Orcrist the Honedge

1.) WACK

The title of the thread should be your character's name and species, just like everyone else's.

2.) BOLD ENTRANCE

The first few lines of the bio have been written inside the bold code, as well as the Likes/Dislikes and Other sections. Go ahead and fix that.

3.) FULL OF HOLES

Literal holes, not to be confused with plot holes. Why are you putting so much spacing between paragraphs in the personality and history? You only need 2 linebreaks, not 3. Trim that down a little.

4.) PUREBRED

You forgot to mention how each move on the moveset was learned (level, egg, etc.) Also, you can start with 1 egg move in addition to other moves.

5.) UNNATURAL

Honedge works a bit differently here from how new Pokédex entries may state. This one isn't really your fault, but needs to be adjusted nonetheless. We use the past Pokédex entries simply stating honedge are born from souls inhabiting swords; in other words, they don't have to be killed by the sword specifically. Additionally, a honedge can be born the normal way through breeding, as it can in the games... somehow.

Also, yes, the eye may be the "true body" of a honedge. However, this does not mean you can have a honedge that looks different from the normal sword. Just wanted to make sure you're aware of that; this feat is fine otherwise.

Those are the only issues I see with the feats, but also note that while it may be able to drain soul juice with its cloth, that doesn't mean it's gonna instakill someone or anything like that. It might be able to weaken someone if the honedge stays attached to them long enough, but remember to be reasonable.

And lastly, you need to add a feat for your ability as well. This is mostly to make sure you understand how to use the ability; a short description will do. Speaking of which...

6.) NO AIMBOT

In regards to how No-Guard is referred to in the personality, I feel the need to clarify something. Since this is a roleplaying environment, No-Guard will not allow your character to land all attacks with a 100% guarantee, especially against other people's characters. The same can be said for the negative side of the ability. It would just give you more leeway to portray him as very accurate and a very poor dodger. Basically, just change the word "never" to "rarely" and stick with that.

Speaking of the personality section, you should really try to add more here. There's not much content. "He's aggressive and cocky because of his ability, he has trouble taking things seriously, and he doesn't like wearing his sheath." That's really all the personality says. Not much substance to it.

7.) GHOSTS AREN'T VAMPIRES

In the likes you have it written that he doesn't get to see the sun due to being a ghost type and coming out at night. Being a ghost type has nothing to do with being nocturnal. That would be a dark type, if anything, and even then we would only enforce it if there were something in the Pokédex stating they're nocturnal.

You also need to have explanations for all likes and dislikes, but you're missing a few. Make sure you have a description for every like and dislike.

8.) A BIT ANTICLIMACTIC

In your character's history, he dies due to... trying to steal a sword, dropping it, and falling on it. This is a bit silly. If you really want to keep it, you're free to, but I just wanted to make sure you think hard about whether you want that in your character's history so you don't regret it later.

9.) POST-CREDITS

Not the biggest deal, but the first two things you have in the Other section should be in his likes and personality respectively. Third one could be put in the history, but you can keep it where it is if you want.

1.) MOVES

You need to include the level each move is learned at, not just a statement that they're level up moves.

2.) NOT ALL HONEDGE
Honedge being created when a soul is slain isn't exactly a natural feat, not only that but it's possible for a honedge to be born without that method. Just give that a fix and you should be good.

3.) NOT ENOUGH HOLES

While there were too many spaces between each paragraph before, there is now too little. It makes your bio a pain to read as it looks like one big block of text. Just space it out once for each paragraph.

4.) NOT ENOUGH PERSONALITY

The first paragraph of your personality is 90% just describing his ability while the last paragraph is something that should go in his dislikes. Cut those out and elaborate more on your character's personality rather than those things. Here are some things to think about: How does your character respond to stress? What does he think of pokemon who call him out as offensive? Does he take initiative when it comes to meeting people? These are just guidelines to help you understand what you need to write about, just answering those questions won't do.

5.) DISLIKES

You were successful in elaborating greatly on your likes, but your dislikes are lacking in proper explanations like the above have. A little more on why he disliks them would do the trick.

6.) HISTORY

A lot better than before, i'll give you that. However, I've noticed that you appear to be leaving out information under the basis of "he doesn't remember" which doesn't really fly. This is a history of your character from a reader looking in, not from your character's view. Any important details need to be noted down-even if he doesn't remember it himself.

Also personal suggestion, you should make it so the liepard wants him still because he has the sword and is actively hunting him. It won't make him an outlaw since the liepard themselves are in the shady business, are unlikely to go to the police, and have no proof of any of the crime. So, it'd give an interesting aspect to the character that could provide an interesting plot points down the line. You don't need to add this or use this idea, it's just something I recommend. ^^

7.) YOU'RE ALREADY IN
You don't need to have the pass code in the bio. You're already in and no longer need to worry about it. Please remove.