(Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin

Subject: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Thu Feb 08, 2018 7:30 pm

» Name:Kit
» Sex:Female
» Species:Fennekin (#653 The Fox Pokémon)
» Affiliation:Wanderer

» Level: Level 5
» Energy:19
» Ability: Magician (HA)
» Moves:

- Scratch (Level 1)
- Tail Whip (Level 1)
- Ember (Level 5)
- Wish (Egg Move)

» Natural Feats:
- Magician (When a Pokémon with Magician hits another Pokémon with a damaging move, it will steal the held item of the Pokémon that it hit. Magician will not activate if the user already has a held item)
- Ear Heater (Fennekin can vent hot air from their ears up to temperatures of 390 °F. This is more used for intimidation than for attacking, though getting too close could still get you burned)
- Twig Burner (Fennekin are able to digest sticks and use them as food. Note: This does not affect a Fennekin character's energy.)

» Relatives:
- Unknown Mother
- Unknown Father

» Personality: Kit is a quiet Pokemon, who tries to stay away from any danger, she is easily frightened & can hide behind most Pokemon or objects. If you get to know her a little, she is a gentle, kind & sweet Pokemon that only wants to make the world a better place.

Ever since training with her sensai, training the brain with reading, testing balance, speed & reaction time. she has gotten more confident & isn't as scared of danger, but occasionally, she will get scared enough to where she hides.

» Likes:

Small spaces: she will fit into small spaces, away from noises & such

Cook: Even though she's still a Fennekin, she likes to cook, mostly browning berries & Gummies with her Ember attack.

Close Friends: She likes spending time with people she can trust.

» Dislikes:

Busy Places: She hates noise & often hides behind Friends when places start to become busy.

Bullies: She hates people bullying, often using her Ember attack, along with her Tail Whip attack to shoo them away.

Heights: She has always been afraid of heights, ever since she was little

» History:Kit never knew her parents, as she was sent to an unknown Pokemon school for children. Being adopted by a Sandslash, who she calls "sensai", Kit has trained under the Old Sandslash's Dojo.

She would cook meals for him & be his "Daughter" almost even though she always denies it, She doesn't like to call her Sensai "Daddy" because it embarrasses her & the Sandslash. Kit has always been a Pokemon who cared for others, training with her Sensai every day until leaving to search for natural knowledge & learn from being a true adventurer, she is in search of a Rescue Team who is willing to let her join.

» Other: Nope...

Administrator's note: The information below is the progress made by the original RPer that could not be edited into the bio template (Items and threads.) Any prospective adopters may want to look through the threads linked below to see if any are open and the relationships this character had with other before filling out an adoption application.

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Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Fri Feb 09, 2018 12:28 am

Sorry, but you need to go back and re-read the rules. Your character application will not be properly gone over until then.

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Sat Feb 10, 2018 10:46 pm

If the situation was the poke, I do apologize for not reading the rules properly, forgot to wait until I got Poke's to post one E V.

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Sun Feb 11, 2018 12:43 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:

1.) NATURAL FEATS

You don't get to have feats for both abilities, just the ability your character actually has. You also need to list any noteworthy feats from pokédex entries.

2.) DISLIKES

You need at least three likes and three dislikes.

3.) HISTORY

I have no idea why you called fennekin a "feline fox" or why feline in specific is highlighted in red. Fennekin isn't a feline at all, and even if it were, the random red text makes no sense and seems to serve no purpose. Aside from that, why does she deny being like a daughter to the sandslash? And how did he "train" her?

4.) GRAMMAR

I assume English isn't your first language, but you're gonna have to work a little harder on your grammar nonetheless. At the very least, use proper punctuation. You're using commas in place of periods and turning entire paragraphs into single run-on sentences.

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Character Moderators. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Sun Feb 11, 2018 7:41 am

1. Removed the other Ability

2. Added fear of heights

3. Removed the feline bit & added why she doesn't like being called the Daughter

4. I cannot help my punctuation, as I am born with Asbergers Syndrome, Punctuation is hard for me, as for English, it is my first language & I do apologise if it was hard to read.

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Tue Feb 13, 2018 8:58 pm

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Sun Feb 18, 2018 10:43 pm

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:

1.) NATURAL FEATS

There are still a few feats from fennekin's pokédex entries that you need to add.

2.) GRAMMAR

You use proper capitalization where new sentences should be, so you clearly know where sentences should begin and end. You know where the period goes. All that's left is to just press the period key, and Asperger's does not stop you from doing that. Roleplaying is a group exercise; it doesn't look like you have a good attitude going into this if you're going to make excuses instead of putting an extra 10 seconds into fixing such a simple problem. It's pretty unfair to the people you'd be writing with if you aren't even going to try to fix issues you may come across, and your unwillingness to make an effort to amend something so simple implies that would be the case.

Your application will not be approved until you show you're willing to be cooperative with people. Fix your grammar.

3.) MISC.

Please do not "bump" your thread multiple times in a row just because it hasn't been looked over yet. That accomplishes nothing but making you look impatient. There is no flood of other applications overshadowing yours; no one's forgetting about it, and posting a period wouldn't help even if that were the case. The only time you need to bump your application is to let staff know that you've just made changes to it.

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Character Moderators. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Mon Feb 19, 2018 1:38 pm

1. Added 2 other Abilities
2. Fixed the grammar & punctuation
3. I understand & I will not do that again.

Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Mon Feb 19, 2018 9:37 pm

Character has been approved!

Please continue putting a bit of extra effort into your writing and working to improve. Don't start slacking now that your application's approved. Remember: staff will be watching. That'll be all!
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Subject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Kit the Fennekin Sun Dec 02, 2018 7:35 am

Character Put Up For Adoption
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