MercifulMelon
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 |  Subject: Streep the Joltik  Sun Nov 06, 2016 9:51 pm | |
| » Name: Streep
» Sex: Male
» Gender: Male
» Species: Joltik (#595 Attaching Pokemon)
» Affiliation: Wanderer
» Level: 4
» Energy: 14 + 4 = 18
» Ability: Compound Eyes (Raises accuracy)
» Moves:
-Pin Missile (Egg Move)
-Leech Life (Level 1)
-Spider Web (Level 1)
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» Natural Feats:
-Absorbing electricity (“ They attach themselves to large-bodied Pokémon and absorb static electricity, which they store in an electric pouch.” Joltik can absorb electricity from pokemon)
» Personality: Streep is an adventurous Joltik. He loves to see the outdoors and hear natural sounds. This is his main motivation in exploring. His other reason to explore is to find an everstone, or the Poke to buy one. He doesn't particularly like the idea of looking tough, and wishes to remain a Joltik. Streep never really liked talking, and has taken to whistling and humming instead (though in important situations he will begrudgingly speak) He overthinks almost everything which gets them into awkward situations.
» Likes: Music (sound of any kind, though they are fond of rain and thunderstorms), Pecha Berries, Forest atmospheres
» Dislikes: People who explore out of spite for another (or a group of explorers who use and abuse their 'fame'), closed spaces
» History: Streep lived with her family, a Beedrill mother and an Ariados father in a small forest where he lived off of the Ariados' berry farm. Due to the peaceful feel of the place he lived in the moment he deemed themselves able to manage alone Streep packed up and set out for the rest of the world.
Streep wandered around looking around for a new place to live until the wonders of exploration enticed him. He now travels, looking for the beauty of the world
» Other: There is nothing else you need to know about my character
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| | Subject: Re: Streep the Joltik Thu Nov 10, 2016 10:56 pm | |
| Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons: The level is fine, but I want to check and make sure you want your character to start out under-leveled. The maximum starting level for characters is 5. You sure you want your character to start off lower than that? 2.) MOVESYour character has an open move slot that could be filled with String Shot or Thunder Wave. 3.) NATURAL FEATSAdd a feat for your chosen ability. Just a short explanation of it will do. 4.) PERSONALITYSo he's adventurous, extremely quiet, and he overthinks things. That's it? Surely, there must be more to this character than just what you have listed, right? Try to elaborate on the personality a bit. Also, I advise you to carefully consider if you actually want him to be so quiet. You may find it difficult to catch the attention of other users here if it's that tasking to verbally interact with your character. 5.) LIKES/DISLIKESYou only have two dislikes; the minimum is three. Describe why your character likes and dislikes all of these things with at least one sentence for each like and dislike. 6.) HISTORY"Streep lived with her family" I was under the impression this character was male. May wanna fix that little error. Aside from that, you have a very big problem: neither of your character's parents is a joltik or galvantula, and there's no indication that he was adopted or otherwise separated from this parent. Either explain the lack of a parent of his species or change the species of one of the parents. While you're at that, you should try to elaborate a bit on the history, as it is quite short. If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Secretaries. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us. | |
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