(Up for Adoption) Cub the Cubone

1.) TEMPLATE

Use the bio template, code and all. This is not optional.

2.) SPECIES

Add the Pokedéx classification.

3.) MOVES

List the way in which the moves were learned (at a specific level, or as an egg move).

4.) NATURAL... ABILITY

It's supposed to say "Natural Feats," not "Natural Ability." The feat you have listed is slightly misleading in that you mention singing, yet Pokédex entries never bring up singing in any form (they just say Cubone's cries sound melodic due to the skull-mask's echo). Last but not least, add a feat to describe your chosen ability. There are things you could explain there such as the fact that Cubone cannot get the normal power boost from Lightning Rod due to being immune to electric attacks (Lightning Rod normally gives special attack to the bearer on activation, but not if they are immune to electric attacks).

5.) Personality

"His lost memories makes it so where he should mourn or be sad about himself."

What? The structure of this sentence makes it difficult to tell what you're trying to say. Reword it.

6.) LIKES/DISLIKES

Add descriptions/explanations for your character's likes and dislikes. A short sentence for each will do. And why is "skulls" plural?

7.) HISTORY

You're clearly intentionally withholding information about your character's past. Don't do that. It's his history, not his memory. Explain his entire life regardless of whether or not he remembers it.

1.) CODE

You wrote much of your bio within the bold code. The section labels are meant to be bolded, but not your own writing.

2.) PERSONALITY

Now the personality's just very short and bare. Elaborate and flesh the character out a bit.

3.) HISTORY

I think you misunderstood what I meant when I said you were intentionally withholding information. First off, the character's "history" barely had anything in it since you put much of it in the "Other" section instead. But since you've fixed that, I'll move on to problems within the history. Rewrite the history in proper order of events, and do not focus so much on the future. Avoid writing it as if it is from your character's perspective as well, since this is supposed to be his history, not his memory. If you wish to talk about what you intend to happen to your character in the future, THAT belongs in the "Other" section. As for the history, give more detail on why he lost his memories and what happened to him after he was orphaned. Whether or not it was intentional, this is important information that you neglected to include.

1.) PERSONALITY

What's up with Cub being cool with aggron?  I hope you can think of a better explanation than "He just is."  I presume one of his parents was an aggron?

2.) HISTORY

Now that your character's history is all nice and proper... there's another issue.  He just kind of gets a skull and bone bestowed upon him by Arceus almighty.  He also has a rather unexplained loss of memory.  If it's from hitting his head or trauma, specify.  Specify what his parents are as well.  For instance, if mommy's a marowak and daddy's an aggron, state this.

What I would personally suggest is for Cub's parents to die while he's still in his egg.  He hatches and sticks around his mother's lovely decaying corpse for a while before eventually taking her skull and a bone and just leaving.  Since he'd be a literal newborn and that would likely be rather traumatic, it easily explains the memory loss you were going for.  This may seem a bit too dark for your tastes depending on your preferences, but Cubone's just dark.

∞.) HISTORY

"Eventually his mother's body decomposes enough that he can take the skull and a bone officially becoming a Cubone."

I'm a bit concerned with the part about "becoming" a cubone. A cubone is a cubone even without the skull-helmet. While you may not have been trying to imply he was something other than a cubone, please remove this part about "becoming" one regardless. The rest of the sentence is fine, though, with him sticking around his mother.

Aside from that, it seems like your grammar is getting progressively worse each time you edit your bio, as if you're rushing more and more. You're constantly switching between present and past tense (stick to past) and the history is sorely lacking in punctuation. Try to improve your grammar a bit.

Character Put Up For Adoption
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Pokemon has been put up for adoption due to inactivity