Leafa the Snivy

1.) CODE

You wrote much of your bio within the bold code. Only the category names should be bolded; your own text should not be.

2.) NAME

This is a bit of a complicated and unusual issue, but there is another character on the site whose nickname is Jade. This character happens to be a snivy as well. While you are allowed to claim this name since a nickname is different from a character's official name, I advise you to consider changing the name due to the nature of the situation. Complications could arise from two snivy characters both being called Jade. Again, you're free to keep the name if you really want it, but it's worth further contemplation.

3.) SPECIES

You missed the classification. As an example, Eevee is the "Evolution Pokemon."

4.) AFFILIATION

The affiliation itself is actually fine; Wanderer is by far the most common starting affiliation for characters on the site; it's entirely allowed. It's the OOC note that you should remove, ironically.

5.) MOVES

The moves are actually fine. You just don't have an egg move listed. Don't you want one? An egg move is allowed.

6.) NATURAL FEATS

Add a feat to describe your character's chosen ability and a feat for snivy's ability to photosynthesize. Also remove the unnecessary personal opinions you tacked on ("So I guess this means if Jade stands in the sunlight for long enough, it will make her better at dodging and landing attacks quicker" and "This means if they need to get a good grip on something, they use vines"). You're free to use natural feats however you see fit as long as it makes sense, but your intended uses don't need to be in the bio next to the actual feats. As a note, two feats is not the limit.

7.) PERSONALITY

This personality is rather poor. Most of your character's personality traits are described with two words, and over half of the "personality" is just some unrelated rant. Put some more work into the personality.

8.) LIKES/DISLIKES

Add descriptions/explanations for each like and dislike. A short sentence for each one will do.

9.) HISTORY

Your history is basically "Jade's life was so boring that the most eventful thing that ever happened was her getting lost in the woods and tripping the other day." The history is supposed to be a summary of the character's history, but yours entirely revolves around a CURRENT event in which the character gets lost. That isn't a history; that information would belong in a thread. The only REAL history here is "Jade was a normal Snivy." Put some effort into giving your character an actual backstory. She surely has parents, presumably has a home, and probably has had friends at some point in her life. If she hasn't had any friends, that means she would likely have social issues, which would be something you could add on to both the personality and history. There is so much you could do, but "She was normal" is most certainly not going to pass as a backstory.

10.) OTHER

She has a rose on her head? Elaborate. How big is it? Where'd she get it? Is it important on a personal level? If so, why? I feel I should note that a rose being used as a head decoration would die relatively quickly, and if not, how? Is it fake? Is it growing on her? That last one is an unacceptable explanation, for the record.

Swiggity swag, what's in the bag? No really, what's in the bag? "Survival equipment" isn't a good enough explanation, and depending on the contents, it may not be allowed.

As for the "bandage," again, this information would belong in a thread rather than in the character's biography.

11.) OOC

Remove this out-of-character bit at the very bottom of your bio. It doesn't need to be there. If you have anything to note, you can say it in a response post to your bio or directly message a staff member.

1.) NAME

Lyra is a taken name (Lyra the Ledyba).

2.) NATURAL FEATS

You didn't add a feat for your chosen ability.

3.) LIKES

So she likes adventuring and exploring. Those are the same thing. By all means, keep both if you want, but you're still gonna need another like.

4.) HISTORY

To be blunt, it's pretty clear you rushed. Your history isn't very well thought-out and you've made the kind of grammatical errors that usually arise from rushing. Everything is explained as quickly as you could possibly manage. Slow down, elaborate, and explain what happened to your character's friends and the effects on her mental state in greater detail.

5.) ROSE OR PARASITE?

Yeah, flowers die once they've been separated from the plant. For the "rose" to live and sustain itself on top of your character, it would have to secretly be an alien parasite.

6.) NO TRICK-OR-TREATING

A bag full of candy? What is this, Halloween? Gummis and sticks are both items that can be found on the site. Therefore your character cannot start with them.

1.) NATURAL FEATS

You STILL haven't done what I've instructed you to do twice now.

2.) "THE CAFÉ"

"Lastly, she met her newest friend, which involved the Café somehow."

What café?  If it is a member-owned shop you're referring to, you should get their permission to be sure they are okay with you including their shop in your character's history.  And how did this café pertain to your character meeting her friend?  "Somehow" is not an acceptable answer.

3.) GHOST OF LYRA'S PAST

You've left instances of the name "Lyra" scattered throughout the bio. I suggest using CTRL+F to check if you have removed all instances of a past name.

4.) P.S.

Stop multi-posting.  In other words, do not respond three times every time your character is checked.  If you have something to add, edit your response post.