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 Graham the Chespin

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SpnoranCyclone

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PostSubject: Graham the Chespin   Graham the Chespin EmptySun Dec 27, 2020 4:40 am

» Name: Graham
» Gender: Male
» Species: #650 Chespin, the Spiny Nut Pokemon
» Affiliation: None at the moment, but looking to become a member of Peak Academy

» Level: 5
» Energy: 19 (14 base energy + 5 levels)
» Ability: Bulletproof
» Moves:
- Growl (Level 1)
- Vine Whip (Level 1)
- Spikes (Egg Move)

» Natural Feats: Relatively tough, able to take a decent amount of punishment thanks to his armor. In addition, Graham's quills are usually soft, but when he flexes them, they become incredibly hard, even able to pierce rock.

» Relatives:
- Abel the Chesnaught (father)
- Rosie the Chesnaught (mother, MIA)
- Alex the Quilladin (older brother)
- Walt the Quilladin (older brother)
- Alvis the Delibird (biological father, MIA)


» Personality: Graham is a smooth talker. He loves to work and LOVES to talk with others. The Chespin likes to show off what he can do, often relishing in the little victories.

Most of all, however, Graham loves to learn. He's an extremely inquisitive Pokemon, looking to absorb as much information as he can. That being said, that doesn't mean he's necessarily bright. Graham's a bit naive, and is a slow learner. However, he works as hard as he can.

» Likes: Graham above all else loves honest and hard workers. On the farm, he was instilled with the belief that hard work beats talent when talent doesn't work hard. Specifically, those who are willing to admit when they have weaknesses. Graham loves talking with those who are able to open themselves up, particularly after his early years. Finally, He LOVES inventions. This in particular comes to devices such as carts and gates. As simple as these devices are, it's Graham's dream to help create an invention that can push farming to the next level without having to rely on Pokemon abilities alone.

» Dislikes: First, he dislikes liars. As stated earlier, his parents instilled in him the belief of an honest and hard worker. Second, The Chespin dislikes the cold. Working on a farm all day, Graham has gotten used to the warm sun. Finally, and most of all, he DESPISES those who have natural talent but refuse to better themselves. To him, he finds that completely and utterly wasteful.

» History: Just off the edge of Grassveil Town lied a small family of Chesnaughts. There, two farmers led their lives happily: Abel and Rosie. Together, the two made a berry farm, and happily lived their life in solitude with their three boys: Alex, Walt, and their youngest, Graham.

Graham in particular was quite unique. The boy worked hard, working from day to night with his family on the farm, as well as getting stronger with his brothers. However, unlike his brothers, strength didn't seem to be his priority. Instead, he was a thinker, often talking with his mom about anything that came on his mind. In particular, he seemed to get rather close to a nearby traveling Delibird, fascinated with the creature's cart. The craftsmanship of the device fascinated the Chespin, and the young Graham wanted to know how he could create more of them.

The Delibird informed the young Chespin of a place known as Peak Academy. According to the bird, it was a place to learn not only about devices such as those, but other useful skills, as well, such as battling. This fascinated the young grass type, who told his parents about the school nonstop. In fact, the bird appeared to grow rather close to the boy. He even gave him a hat as a token of their friendship.

The father, however, seemed less than enthusiastic. It wasn't the fact that Graham wanted to leave the farm that was the issue. It was that Delibird. Something seemed... OFF about him. ESPECIALLY how he looked at Rosie on his visits...

One day, it all came to a head during a training session. The boys were training together, this time, learning how to use their egg moves. Alex and Walt were both able to use Belly Drum with ease. Graham, however, was unable to use it whatsoever. It seemed extremely strange at first...

...until the young boy used Spikes instead.

Suddenly, it all made sense. The arrival of the bird, the way he looked at Rosie... this wasn't just some traveling salesman! This was Graham's biological father! Hurt and betrayed, Abel pulled Rosie aside, now completely furious! In a messy affair, Rosie was banished from the farm, never to return. The Delibird would soon follow, now fearful for his own life.

From that point forward, Graham was looked at with disdain from his family. The poor boy received nothing but vitriol from his brothers, now seeing him as nothing more than a bastard. Abel, meanwhile, wanted no more reminders of the child.

As such, one day, Abel kicked Graham out, sending him towards the direction of the academy. Now determined to prove his worth to both his family and himself, Graham seeks to be a part of the academy, looking to find a purpose in life.

» Other: Graham wears a cowboy hat. It was given to him by his biological father, Alvis, and has holes on the top to fit his spikes.


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PostSubject: Re: Graham the Chespin   Graham the Chespin EmptySun Dec 27, 2020 9:50 pm

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:

Welcome to the site! I'm very sorry to inform you that your character bio cannot currently be approved as you have negative values of poke. Please read through the site rules and correctly post in the starter poke thread to claim the currency needed for your first character!

Other than that Graham seems like a solid character! His family aren't very nice though. Graham didn't choose to be born! I also love his cowboy hat. It's a very fun accessory~

There are only a few things to mention that may need fixing or acknowledging before your character can be approved once you have obtained your starter poke!;

1) Peak Academy
Although Peak Academy is an IO its founder and second are both currently not active on the forum. This shouldn't prevent you from starting solo threads themed around peak academy, or your character studying at peak academy in-character however it may affect your ability to gain rewards out of character.

This is just informing you of its current state so that you are aware of the situation in the case that you wish to alter the bio in light of knowing this.

2) Natural Feats
You have not included any natural feats for Chespin other than the ability that Graham possesses. Whilst adding the ability here is correct and should not be removed, Chespin also has dex entries talking about its quills which should be detailed in this section. Please add those to show that you understand your character's abilities and limitations as a species.

3) Rosie's death
Your relationships section says Rosie is deceased, but the history never mentions it. Does that mean she died after she was banished? Or should this be updated just to specify that she is also MIA. Please let me know which is the case either through a reply or by editing the bio to clarify. If she did die but it is irrelevant to Graham's history as he does not know, you can still add it as a quick note for clarity.

4) Species Name
Chespin is the Spiny Nut Pokemon not the Spiky Nut Pokemon. Wouldn't stop an approval but its good to fix it whilst other things are being tweaked ^-^

5) Formatting
Not essential for approval but nice if you can do so; the headers in the bio template should be bolded for ease of reading.

There is also a typo in the history: 'hhis' which you may wish to fix if you are making edits, however this will not affect the approval of Graham's bio.


If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Character Moderators, either through the Chatbox, Discord or through Private Messaging. We will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Once changes have been made  as requested please bump this thread so staff will see.

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PostSubject: Re: Graham the Chespin   Graham the Chespin EmptyMon Dec 28, 2020 3:48 am

@Solilo wrote:
Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:

Welcome to the site! I'm very sorry to inform you that your character bio cannot currently be approved as you have negative values of poke. Please read through the site rules and correctly post in the starter poke thread to claim the currency needed for your first character!

Other than that Graham seems like a solid character! His family aren't very nice though. Graham didn't choose to be born! I also love his cowboy hat. It's a very fun accessory~

There are only a few things to mention that may need fixing or acknowledging before your character can be approved once you have obtained your starter poke!;

1) Peak Academy
Although Peak Academy is an IO its founder and second are both currently not active on the forum. This shouldn't prevent you from starting solo threads themed around peak academy, or your character studying at peak academy in-character however it may affect your ability to gain rewards out of character.

This is just informing you of its current state so that you are aware of the situation in the case that you wish to alter the bio in light of knowing this.

2) Natural Feats
You have not included any natural feats for Chespin other than the ability that Graham possesses. Whilst adding the ability here is correct and should not be removed, Chespin also has dex entries talking about its quills which should be detailed in this section. Please add those to show that you understand your character's abilities and limitations as a species.

3) Rosie's death
Your relationships section says Rosie is deceased, but the history never mentions it. Does that mean she died after she was banished? Or should this be updated just to specify that she is also MIA. Please let me know which is the case either through a reply or by editing the bio to clarify. If she did die but it is irrelevant to Graham's history as he does not know, you can still add it as a quick note for clarity.

4) Species Name
Chespin is the Spiny Nut Pokemon not the Spiky Nut Pokemon. Wouldn't stop an approval but its good to fix it whilst other things are being tweaked ^-^

5) Formatting
Not essential for approval but nice if you can do so; the headers in the bio template should be bolded for ease of reading.

There is also a typo in the history: 'hhis' which you may wish to fix if you are making edits, however this will not affect the approval of Graham's bio.


If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Character Moderators, either through the Chatbox, Discord or through Private Messaging. We will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Once changes have been made  as requested please bump this thread so staff will see.

Thank you so much for the feedback! I have made the edits on the bio. In addition, I have applied for the Poke required. Please let me know if there is anything else I need to do. Thanks again!
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PostSubject: Re: Graham the Chespin   Graham the Chespin EmptyMon Dec 28, 2020 10:54 pm

This character has been approved!


Everything looks fine now! I look forward to seeing Graham in threads! c:


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