Amber the Charmander (WIP)

1.) NATURAL FEATS

Bar the one for Blaze, the natural feats you have are... just flat-out made up. Natural feats are supposed to be canon things that pokemon can actually do according to the pokédex, not just made-up things that sound like they kinda fit. Even if you can explain these things through other means, they are not natural feats and do not belong on this list.

2.) PERSONALITY

You first say that Amber's moral compass takes a backseat to her desires, then you say she has a moral compass that borderlines on being a code of conduct in terms of importance to her. This makes no sense. It's fine if she's reluctant about helping people, but within the first few sentences of the personality, it's stated that she actually acts on her selfish desires, which is then contradicted later.

"Her single-minded thirst for knowledge typically overrides her moral compass, to the extent she often uses others to further her own ambitions."

You have it very clearly stated that she will act in her own interests and use others, then you later say just as clearly that she prioritizes protecting others. Either she's so self-interested that she'll step over others to get what she wants, or she has a set of rules that mandates she put others before herself. You can't have both. If you had something else in mind here, it needs to be more clearly explained. If it's supposed to be a struggle where she sometimes chooses to help others and sometimes decides to just help herself, then say that. Clearly.

3.) DISLIKES

You say Amber dislikes liars and is quite critical of deceptive behavior, yet you've also said she's willing to manipulate people to get what she wants. That seems like kind of a double-standard, which is fine, but the words don't really reflect that when they should.

That isn't the only issue with her dislike of lying, however. You've also said that "she's also developed a sixth sense that can detect a falsehood from a mile away." To be blunt... no. No matter how sharp your character is, she can't just go around "detecting" lies because her spidey sense is tingling.

4.) HISTORY

First off, you seem to have made up a subdungeon for Fiery Chasm. Making up your own named locations is not allowed.

But more importantly, Fiery Chasm is a dungeon. There is no civilization like the one you've depicted here. If your character grew up here, she grew up in the wild, not a tightly-knit community with laws and lava boats. The lava boats don't even make sense in the first place.

5.) TOME OF THE SPECIAL SNOWFLAKE

This book is a definite no. Everything about it: no. If you want a book, make it a normal book, not some super special magic tome of eldritch knowledge. You can't give your character an item of such special significance. Even if it turned out this thing is actually just a really old cookbook, things like the indestructible casing and magic lock are not okay.