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 Kel-Zich Qin III the Natu

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PostSubject: Kel-Zich Qin III the Natu   Tue Aug 02, 2016 1:08 pm

» Name: Kel-Zich Qin III
» Sex: Male
» Gender: Male
» Species: Natu, #177, Tiny Bird Pokémon
» Affiliation: Wanderer that wants to own a shop

» Level: 5
» Energy: 14 BE + 5 = 19 E
» Ability: Early Bird
» Moves:
- Roost (Egg move)
- Leer (Level 1)
- Peck (Level 1)
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» Natural Feats:
- Early Bird: The Pokémon awakens quickly from sleep.

» Personality: A grand mind, Kel-Zich is always one that is usually found tinkering with this or that in his small home. Kel-Zich has a somewhat idealistic view of the world, seeing the large-scale beauty in everything, but can also see the joy in the littlest of things. He can be somewhat scatterbrained, moving awkwardly and almost like a kid in a candy store, but he can be a good friend. Kel-Zich tends to know a lot about things, but finds it difficult to express himself the way he wants to. His dream is to create something that could inspire the world, and to make his own mark on history.

» Likes:
- Nature: Kel-Zich is a person that adores nature in every little aspect of it.
- His own inventions: As said in the personality, Kel-Zich wants to get marked in history from his own inventions, so he's always proud when he makes an invention.
- Making friends: Kel-Zich is a very sociable Pokemon and will do anything to get friends.

» Dislikes:
- Darkness: Kel-Zich is actually afraid of the dark.
- Show-offs: He hates people that show off their skills as in a 'Oh, look at me, and I can do this and that! I'm so cool!' kind of way.
- Crowds: As much as he likes getting friends, he doesn't like to be in a crowd of friends, where he can't concentrate.

» History: Kel-Zich was born to a family of wanderers and even shopkeepers. Most of Kel-Zich's siblings were younger, making him one of the oldest in the family. He always had a passion of creating things on his own, which his parents were surprised at. As for his siblings, they adored him most of the time, but it quickly faded away because of the lack of money the family had, so Kel-Zich had to give the inventions to his father that then sold them for not that much of a price whatsoever, making the family earn 500 Poke from it.


Kel-Zich was disappointed at his father of what low of a price he sold those inventions but decided to let it go. The rest of his life was somewhat normal, except when he one day went into a Mystery Dungeon by himself. He didn't like it that much, but wanted to go around, to see if he could find anything useful. To his surprise, Kel-Zich started to grow used to the Mystery Dungeon near his home already. It was amusing! He didn't find anything though, but was happy that he went there. The Mystery Dungeon didn't have strong Pokemon there, so he wasn't hurt. When he came back home, his parents were really angry at him, he could've got himself in much more trouble!

His parents then saw the excitement in the kid's eyes, deciding to teach him about the Mystery Dungeons. The studying process wasn't that easy for Kel-Zich, but he did learn some things! When Kel-Zich learned some basic things about Mystery Dungeons, he then most of the time helped his father with Mystery Dungeons, just to collect things, not fight. With that, Kel-Zich even got interested in becoming a shopkeeper or whatnot. That then made the two parents a bit confused about what their child actually wanted. Did he wanted to be a Wanderer, or a Shopkeeper? As some years passed Kel-Zich got just a little bit stronger, but not so strong as his siblings, everyone was already evolved, and he was still a Natu. Kel-Zich really didn't care much about that though, so when he got old enough, he decided to go live on his own, leaving his family.

» Other: Kel-Zich invented some little things from the fact that he wasn't that old at the time. So he created a communication system like a phone, but it is somewhat hard to operate, it's even connected to some kind of wire, which could lead to every part of the world, but that would be pretty hard to do, so he couldn't make that happen.

He then invented a very weird and almost non functional light bulb that needed electric types to power it up until it's charged up fully so it would light up the Pokemon's home.

And lastly, he invented a little squishy toy for little kids, it's like a little blob with eyes that can turn into anything the kid desires. Kel-Zich doesn't like to call it an invention, but it's still something!


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PostSubject: Re: Kel-Zich Qin III the Natu   Wed Aug 03, 2016 1:50 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:



1.) NATURAL FEATS

Your "Sharp Eyes" feat does not seem to be supported by any Pokedex entries. The only place in which this is even mentioned is on a trading card, which is the least accurate source for any information involving Pokemon and therefore completely disregarded here. Also, try not to use game systems such as "turns." This is more of a free-world roleplaying site than a DnD site and, therefore, we try to avoid strict mechanical systems that you would see in games. Note that you are not required to have at least two feats if you cannot find anything.

2.) PERSONALITY

Your character's view that emotions are nothing more than chemical anomalies is somewhat of a nihilistic trait, which heavily contradicts the rest of his personality. Why is he so cheery and, more importantly, how is he "the best friend someone could ask for" when he doesn't even think emotions mean anything? Elaborate and address this in a way that makes sense if you wish to keep the personality as it is. While on the topic of the personality, you're somewhat lacking in negative traits, which I would advise you try to remedy. Last but not least, change the wording of the following: "but he is the best friend someone could ask for." This statement is presented as a fact when it cannot be validated and there are likely better candidates for friends regardless of how nice he is. In other words, change it to appear as less of a statement of fact.

3.) FOR SCIENCE!

Please elaborate on Kel-Zich's "inventions." It is important that we can verify whatever you intended fits in with this site and is properly managed. I suggest using the "Other" section for this.


If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Secretaries. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.

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