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 Eve the Ralts

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PostSubject: Eve the Ralts   Eve the Ralts EmptyFri Mar 18, 2016 5:05 pm

» Name: Eve
» Sex: Female
» Gender: Female
» Species: #280 Ralts, the Feeling Pokemon
» Affiliation: Student of History

» Level: 5
» Energy: 13
» Ability: Trace
» Moves:
-Growl (Level 1)
-Confusion (Level 4)
-Synchronoise (Egg Move)
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» Natural Feats:
-Emotion sensing- Using the horns on her head, Eve can sense positive and negative emotions. Such an ability is useful when making first impressions on a pokemon's intentions.
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» Personality: When it comes to the history of the world, Eve is a total nerd. From a young age, she has always loved listening to stories, especially those that are true. She finds real events vastly more interesting than made up fantasies. Having grown up exclusively with a family of her own kind, she tends to take after their habits. She befriends positive pokemon and avoids negative feeling ones. More of a thinker than a heavy lifter, Eve hates doing physical work and would rather do work that would challenge her mind. As she is a young and naive Ralts, a bit sheltered due to her origins from a small community, she isn't too learned about the modern world. She may be book smart but she has very little Street smarts so to say. She kind of relies on her emotion sensing abilities to know if she's in a bad or good situation.

As far as she is socially, she has a tendency to judge people based on what they feel like. If they are positive feeling she treats them well. Negative feeling, she avoids them. She believes only good pokemon can feel positive emotions as she is still too young to understand the complexities of emotion. As far as her family, she loves them very much. Of course her younger and older brother annoy her at times, they never hated each other. As for her parents, she has a deep bond of trust with them. With their support, she found the will to explore her interests in history, to learn and see more in the world by leaving home.

» Likes: Stories(She got her love of reading from her mother, she simply grew more interested more she read like any other child would.), learning about history(Though she is a huge fan of stories, she finds stories from history much more fascinating. This is due to the fact that while fantasies are wondrous, great inventors in real life are just more amazing because they happened in real life. At least to her.), being around positive people(Look the reason Eve likes being around positive Pokemon is because of her kind's ability. Positive emotions can make a ralts feel warm and comfortable when they are in close proximity. She literally feels much better when I'm around such positivity. It's clear why she likes this. It makes her happy and makes her feel good.)

» Dislikes: Physical work(She isn't strong ant she can't maintain doing physical labor for too long. She just isn't good at it. She'd rather be using her brain muscle instead of her body muscles because she finds it more enjoyable) irrational acting(She just can't understand why others don't think before they act, choose not to be patient. She is of the philosophy that it's better to look before you leap. That was how she was taught. It irritates her like a pet peeve when she sees people rush into actions without thinking.), and the feeling of negative emotion(Too much too quick can actually make her feel ill. Like mentioned before her kind prefers to stay around positivity like an instinct. She knows negativity makes her feel bad and sick so she avoids it whenever she can.)

» History: Eve was the second out of three children of two Gardevoir parents, growing up in a small community town. There was little to do other than go to school or work. Eve got along with her parents and siblings quite well. Kinda hard to turn out to be a bad egg when your entire family can sense when you start heading toward a bad place emotionally. So she had a lot of support and help from her family and vice versa. The community was mostly a farming one, her parents working as teachers at the small school. With nothing to do, Eve turned to books. Her mother taught her to read and shared her collection of books. Eve took to the books on history, finding the stories of the past fascinating. Her mother nurtured that interest, teaching her all she could. Her mother knowing how to read a bit of unown letters due to her own experience in reading. However, her knowledge only reached a limited level, her mother knowing only a short measure of how to read the ancient writings.

Eve soon got a desire to head out to the world to find out more about its history. Once she was old enough to travel alone, she decided to leave home to satisfy her curiosity. She'd need a place where she could have access to more historical knowledge. She recalled that there were organizations named guilds which traveled all over the world, seeing places normal pokemon never saw. She asked around her small community and found an old Taurus who had heard of them. Even delivered food to a town with a guild. So, asking to hitch a ride and after a loving goodbye for her family, she started her journey to Grassveil Town.

» Other: N/A


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PostSubject: Re: Eve the Ralts   Eve the Ralts EmptySat Mar 19, 2016 12:57 am


Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:

1.) MOVES
There's nothing wrong with the moves, but I want to make sure you actually know what you're getting into.  You can only use Synchronoise on something with the same type as your character, meaning Psychic-types.  It is a Psychic-type move.  You will only be able to do "not-very-effective" damage in most cases.  This will be a very weak move, and unless you want it for some specific purpose such as making your character weak, there are better options for an egg move.

2.) PERSONALITY
The personality is barely a paragraph long and only really says "She likes learning and befriending positive Pokémon."  Surely, there is more to her than just that.

3.) LIKES/DISLIKES
You have the bare minimum number of likes and dislikes, and they are all barely a sentence long if even that.  Half of them don't even give any context as to why she likes or dislikes them, instead basically saying "Because."  Why does she like learning about history?  "It's an obsession" doesn't explain WHY it's an obsession.  Since when does a lack of strength equate to disliking physical activity?  You can be a bodybuilder and absolutely hate work just due to being lazy, and on the flip-side, you can love exercising or working despite being physically weak.  The explanation that needs changing the most, though, is "It's a ralts thing."  Even if you're referring to Pokédex entries, you'll need further explanation than "It's a ralts thing."

4.) HISTORY
How could this ralts' history have possibly been so boring and uneventful?  "She was born, she read a lot of books, she learned to read Unown, then she left."  That's her entire history.  Nothing about her parents or siblings?  All that's given about her family is that her mom also reads books.  She never had any friends?  No enemies?  She never went anywhere, never did anything memorable?  Never even had any meaningful conversations with her family?  She just stayed home her entire life and never talked to anyone other than to read books with her mom?

SUMMARY
This bio is far too short and far too bare.  Everything about it seems rushed, like a means to an end.  I'm afraid you'll need to put some more work into it.

If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Secretaries. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.
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PostSubject: Re: Eve the Ralts   Eve the Ralts EmptySat Mar 19, 2016 8:45 pm

I added a bit more. And yes, I am aware of the egg move. The point of Eve is she weak as far as battle and other physical things. She is meant to play more of a brains role. Support you could say.
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PostSubject: Re: Eve the Ralts   Eve the Ralts EmptySun Mar 20, 2016 12:19 am


Character has been approved!
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