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 (Up for Adoption) Leif the Treecko

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PostSubject: (Up for Adoption) Leif the Treecko   Mon Dec 04, 2017 2:51 am

» Name: Leif
» Sex: Male
» Species: #252 Treecko - The Wood Gecko Pokemon
» Affiliation: Wanderer

» Level: 5
» Energy: 19
» Ability: Unburden
» Moves:
- Leer - Lvl 1
- Pound - Lvl 1
- Absorb - Lvl 5
- Magical Leaf - Egg Move

» Natural Feats:
- Gecko Feet: The soles of its feet are covered by countless tiny spikes, enabling it to walk on walls and ceilings.
- Forecast: Treecko is able to sense humidity with its tail to predict the next day's weather.
- Unburden: Gets faster when a held item is lost.

» Relatives:
- Drake (Sceptile father)
- Selena (Sceptile mother)

» Personality: Quiet and usually contented. He usually feels obligated to make whatever puns he can. Somewhat of a glutton. A talented gardener. He's notably short-tempered when stressed. Well, he's easier to upset, anyway. He likes to keep moving, as he's a bit antsy.

» Likes: Food (he's a bit of a glutton, and enjoys eating; he thinks more clearly on a full stomach), puns (he just loves these, and finds them humorous; most others tend to groan in agony; if he stops making puns at every opportunity, you KNOW something's wrong), gardening (he got into it because of his mother; now it brings back pleasant memories of his mother, and he likes to grow Berries and Seeds and mix them together for a delicious meal).

» Dislikes: Bitter foods (he prefers sweet things), desert-like conditions (he knows that Fire-Types are at even more of an advantage during such conditions; besides, it's hard on his plants, as they're usually ones that, while best raised in warm conditions, are designed for moist, rainforest conditions), tight spaces (he suffers from claustrophobia).

» History: Leif was raised in a rainforest by Selena, his mother, who was an avid and talented gardener. He never met his father, Drake, as the Sceptile had gone out on what was supposed to be a quick and easy exploration just before Leif hatched. The Sceptile never returned. Selena did her best to raise her cheerful son, and taught him everything she knew about plants and how to raise them, as well as some simple recipes. Hearing the stories his mother told him about his adventurous father and his mother's encouragement to find his own path in the world led him to leave home, with his mother's blessing and prayers, to do just that. She told him, as he left, "Your father would be so proud to see you leaving home like this! Just be careful. And make sure to keep in touch! Try to find the Guild in Grassveil, they can help you on your journey to be... Whatever you want to be!" She didn't mention the fact that Leif's father had vanished partly because he had never done so.

» Other: Wears a collar made out of vines, with a single flower on it, positioned like a tag.

Administrator's note: The information below is the progress made by the original RPer that could not be edited into the bio template (Items and threads.) Any prospective adopters may want to look through the threads linked below to see if any are open and the relationships this character had with other before filling out an adoption application.

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PostSubject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Leif the Treecko   Tue Dec 05, 2017 8:23 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:



1.) ENERGY

You did the energy calculation right, but you have that listed as Base Energy, which it is not. That's your character's TOTAL energy; the five levels your character starts with are not part of the base. So, you have the right number, but you shouldn't have it labeled as BE.

2.) NATURAL FEATS

There feats you have are fine, but you need to add a feat for your character's ability as well. A short, basic description will do. Also, the note that you got them from the list can and should be removed.

3.) LIKES/DISLIKES

"He's a Grass-type" is not a good explanation for him loving gardening so much. Also, why would he dislike harsh sunlight when it's just as beneficial for Grass-types (and many plants) as it is for Fire-types? Disliking fighting a Fire-type in such weather makes sense, but in general, it seems odd for him to dislike it.

4.) GENERAL

This application as a whole is very short and lackluster. Normally, I'd just advise you to put more effort into it, but this is a bit extreme. Your character's personality is pretty much just "He's a sweet, calm, adorable dude but don't make him angry. You won't like him when he's angry." Not only is this a really overdone and unoriginal trope, but it's basically his entire personality, and there isn't even any work put into elaborating on it or making it particularly original.

The only thing to him other than this is that he likes plants and gardening, which has no explanation beyond "He's a Grass-type." It's about half of his personality, 1/3 of his likes and all of his history, and without any real explanation for why he even likes it so much in the first place. No, being a Grass-type is not a sufficient explanation; there's nothing to imply they have an inherent love of plants and tending to them. Even if it were the case that they're just all natural gardeners, you would still need more of an explanation with how it's such an unnecessarily large part of his character.

Speaking of which, the history is literally "He wandered around and gardened." Whether it's intentional or not, this history is unacceptably bare. If there has truly been nothing noteworthy in the slightest in his entire life thus far, that's fine, but you can give him some background at the very least. You can't just be allowed to make everything up as you go, because then you could accidentally decide on something that isn't okay and it might not get properly reviewed.

Your character's likes and dislikes are at the absolute minimum, too, which isn't helping. Even his name is really bland and unoriginal, and unless that's intentional and you really want to keep it, I'd suggest trying to think of something more interesting or you may end up regretting him lacking that addition to his identity in the future.


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PostSubject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Leif the Treecko   Thu Dec 07, 2017 7:06 am

PrimordialPrim and I worked to improve it a lot! I'd like you to take another look!

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PostSubject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Leif the Treecko   Sun Dec 10, 2017 10:00 am

Character has been approved!




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PostSubject: Re: (Up for Adoption) Leif the Treecko   Sun Dec 02, 2018 7:45 am


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