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PostSubject: Yooka the Kecleon   Sat Sep 03, 2016 5:00 am

» Name: Yooka
» Sex: Female
» Gender: Female
» Species: Kecleon (Color Swap Pokemon) #352
» Affiliation: Wandering Philomath

» Level: 5
» Energy: 22 (17+5)
» Ability: Color Change
» Moves:
-Bind (lvl4)
-Astonish (lvl1)
-Thief (lvl1)
-Recover (egg move)

» Natural Feats:
--Kecleon can change its body color at will to blend in with its surroundings. However, the belly pattern will remain unchanged and if its startled it'll revert back to its original color.
--Due to the effects of the Color Change ability, whenever the Kecleon is hit by an opponents attack. The Kecleon's type will change to the typing of the attack.
--A Kecleon's tongue is long and very stretchy, It can be used to instantly ensnare targets if they aren't fast enough or aware.

» Personality:
Yooka is minorly apathetic. She still shows some if not very little interest, enthusiasm, or concern over many things. She ends up not caring about things if it doesn't have to do with what she likes, but she will still end up taking mental notes on some thing she doesnt like but needs to know.
She tries to be very social. She will usually start or get into conversations with others but she usually cant hold the conversation without losing interest causing many issues with the ones she's talking to.
Yooka isn't scared of the notion of fighting, she just doesn't like to be in one. If she is caught within a fight. She would be surprisingly calm and will try to not interfere. You could even see her watch from a distance if she was interested in it. If a brawl somehow included her she would try to talk her opponent out of it or give them a new target. If it becomes inevitable, she knows how to protect herself very well, but she isn't physically strong so she'll likely try to get away instead of fight. If she cant get away then she would use the environment to her advantage.
Yooka is very perceptive and nimble. She is good at understanding things, figuring things out, and notice things that some others cannot and she can accomplish alot of things quickly without fumbling around, but that doesn't mean she can do everything right.

» Likes:
~Puzzles~
anything that makes her think, she likes. Not just limited to puzzles itself. If there seems to be a locked door with no key or obvious way of opening. She'll probably find a solution but she wont stick to it for very long if its not important.
~Factual Information~
She likes to learn everything about almost anything related to what shes likes. The more info she learns the more she can get out of it. How to use an escape orb more proficiently, or how to get out of sticky situations.
~Mysterious objects~
She likes exceedingly rare items that don't have a definite meaning but exude some kind of power, Similar to the friendbow, how does it make pokemon so happy...

» Dislikes:
~Fighting~
She hates physical fights, but that dont mean she cant protect herself. She'll more likely talk your ear off then squeezing your neck.
~Environmental contact~
She hates getting really dirty... If she doesn't have to go through a swamp, she'll be more then happy to go around, She's use to it though and wont freak-out if forced to.
~Getting interrupted~
If shes explaining something or trying to figure something out, she'll snap at the interrupter, unless it saves her from alot of trouble, which then she'll apologize.

» History:
Yooka was a regular Kecleon and an only child raised at Rainfront Town by her Father. She didn't know her mother who was actually an extremely generous Quagsire and a real sweetheart at best. She supposedly disappeared a few months after Yooka was born heading over to grassveil to visit some friends and ever since her mothers disappearance her father was never the same, he always said 'she never made it out of serene cave' one way or another and no one knew where she was. Not even the guild members of grassveil itself knew, they only assume she perished by the feral pokemon inside the cave.
Yooka's father was originally known as a pretty friendly Kecleon and generally a well-rounded merchant, but as the years went by he slowly changed into a good-for-nothing lazy father who doesn't take his job seriously. Yooka ended up taking care of both of them and the job at a young age... Most of the time she would be doing everything around the place.
One day when she was nearly of the age, she couldn't take his irresponsibility and laziness, she decided to outright leave her father. She thought she would be better off alone, she can handle herself. She knows what to expect out there. She always wanted to know things out in the world that this stuck-up job cant find out anyway, she didn't care if her father died or if his career will plummet. He could go rot in misery for all she cared. She would be happier wandering around a dangerous place finding new things rather than be cooped up taking care of someone who doesn't appreciate it. At night, she snuck out of town and began her own journey.

» Other: None

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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Sat Sep 03, 2016 5:14 am

Will it be fine, Declined, or just not accepted for being existant.

I'll try to think more into the personality and history parts If they are problematic but I'll need a bit of help figuring out how exactly to reword it. If needed I guess I could add what her history was before the event, but I don't see how that would help. x-x
edit: nevermind I do see how it could help, but it would hard to input. Without spoiling the 'story'

The hint's in the existance of the purple pack

Edit2: After looking at other characters in the list. I have noticed a fatal flaw and a couple things I may need help with... first the fatal flaw, The name isn't a self-insert, the account name is like a name of the story, it was suppose to depict the characters I had. I didn't think it through, like at all... Instead of 'Yooka' the first out of five it shouldve been something like 'ForgottenKIN' (I feel like an idiot. Which I could be.)
as for the minor problems... I can't make personalities all to well... It's so much harder then I originally thought., and its almost the same for history, anything that happens before the event is semi-easy to explain yet completely usless to put. what comes after would seem super short and more like an event then actual history. I'd like to keep the theme but if theres someway to make it easier...... er...

well, I can almost say for sure its gonna be rejected for awhile. lol

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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Mon Sep 05, 2016 3:00 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:



1.) SPECIES

Kecleon is not the "Chameleon Pokemon." Good guess, though. Oh, and the character's type (in this case, Normal) is not a part of their species.

2.) ENERGY

Got your math a bit wrong. Try again.

3.) MOVES

As of OR/AS, Kecleon does not learn Synchronoise at level 1.

4.) NATURAL FEATS

Do not include any additional information that is not directly stated in Pokedex entries from the games. You currently have a lot of assumptions pertaining to the feats you've listed, such as your claim that Kecleon changes colors when hit by moves. Add a feat for Kecleon's noteworthy tongue. Last but not least, separate the feats so that they are more easily distinguishable; they are currently very jumbled up.

5.) PERSONALITY

This personality makes very little sense. Yooka gets nervous around those with "elemental properties?" Every Pokemon has elemental properties. Every. Single. One. Coming from a kecleon, this is particularly nonsensical, as they can change to every type and can learn many elemental moves. How does an inquisitive and presumably intelligent philosopher manage to get it in her head that all Psychic-types are to blame for the acts of one? Currently, Yooka is not a calm and inquisitive philosopher; she's an idiot and a nervous wreck.

6.) LIKES

"She'll find the solution" is a rather matter-of-fact statement, implying that your character has the ability to solve anything, no matter how complicated. This would be unacceptable, so change the wording to say something more along the lines of "She's likely to find the solution." And again with the thing about "elemental Pokemon." ALL Pokemon are elemental to some extent; kecleon is arguably one of the most well-known for being elemental, so it makes no sense for your character to find such common traits to be so very interesting and odd, and it makes even less sense that she isn't equally interested in herself.

7.) HISTORY

I will ignore minor issues with the history for now in favor of the major problem: intentional withholding of information. Regardless of what your reasoning is, it is absolutely unacceptable to withhold any information on your character's backstory. It doesn't matter if you're concerned with "spoiling" or if you simply don't think it's worth mentioning. Explain everything, not just your character's perspective on things.

8.) BACKPACK

The backpack you've described has quite a complex design. You will need to talk to an admin about whether or not this is acceptable for a character to start with.


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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Wed Sep 07, 2016 3:24 am

Would it be wierd to say I didn't play the ruby/sapphire remakes... >->
I used my Y copy for some info... I don't know how the heck I got chameleon, lol.
I'll use google for everything now :P

I decided to fudge it, completely re-word the story... lol
but this time I had a better understanding of what to expect.

Scolding Time! yay! x¬x

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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Thu Sep 08, 2016 7:09 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:



1.) NATURAL FEATS

Your feat for the tongue includes some information not supported by Pokédex entries.  Use the feat however you see fit as long as it makes sense, but don't list anything in the feats section unless it is explicitly stated by an official source.

2.) PERSONALITY

Avoid matter-of-fact statements pertaining to how others view your character, such as "she gets hated by others" and " she becomes gleeful, which makes others think she's wierd."  Word things like this in more of way that suggests someone MAY feel this way toward her, rather than stating that they WILL feel this way.  For instance, rather than saying "No one likes her," instead say "Someone may dislike her."

3.) HISTORY

"on the day they were planning to escape, they were caught by the Meowstics but was given each a smile and an armband or headband with a logo of a planet with blue unown spelling KIN, and on the opposite side were their names. They didn't know what they were for but they all promised each other to wear it, as a reminder."

What?  So they tried to escape and were caught by Hitler and Female Hitler.  Then the Hitler duo just... gave them armbands and released them?  That makes absolutely no sense.  NOTHING about that makes any sense at all.  You're going to need to elaborate, and while you're at it, try to improve your grammar.  It is currently extremely unclear what's going on here due to a combination of a lack of information and poor grammar. In fact, this entire history is a bit lacking in the "logic" department.

Aside from that, there's also the question of Yooka's parents.  Who were they and why did they give her to the Hitler club?

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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Sat Sep 10, 2016 7:10 am

Ah... Milord. The only person I will ever accept a scolding from. -ω-

I did look for info for the tongue usage, There was nothing in the games besides the basic, its sneaking then ensaring. I didn't know I couldn't use the anime as reference till I was told by Solilo after your post. So I'll scrap that idea altogether.

Edit: >-> Deleting everything, because I felt like it again.
I'm trying a completely different story. ~ω~

Edit2: 'Since' History is going to take awhile... Send me a message on how the rest of the character sheet is... if you feel like it...
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Edit3: Screw it, i'll leave it as is. Time for the analysis!


Scolding time! :D

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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Tue Sep 13, 2016 10:09 pm

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:



1.) NATURAL FEATS

You can't use the anime as a reference.  That doesn't mean you get to scrap feats that are supported within Pokédex entries from the games.  I already told you to simply leave out any information not directly stated in the games.  So, put the tongue feat back, and don't add in any unnecessary information that isn't officially stated.  If you're having trouble with this, just copy and paste a Pokédex entry.

2.) HISTORY

Pokémon have been shown in the games, manga, and even the anime to be capable of mentally functioning on a relatively normal level virtually from birth.  In other words, they seem perfectly capable of recalling memories from early childhood, so you'll need a bit of a better explanation for why your character doesn't remember her mother.  I'd suggest either lowering the amount of time before her mother's disappearance so that Yooka just doesn't have much memory of her in the first place, or having something happen to Yooka to affect her memory.  While you're at it, also explain how and why her mother disappeared.  What happened?


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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Wed Sep 14, 2016 12:57 am

1) meh... >->

2) Quick enough fix, but dunno if its what you expect.

Time to see what he thinks... ._.

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PostSubject: Re: Yooka the Kecleon   Fri Sep 16, 2016 8:10 am

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