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PostSubject: Maryam the Miltank   Thu Aug 25, 2016 4:35 am

» Name: Maryam
» Sex: Female
» Gender: Female
» Species: Miltank, milk cow pokemon, #241
» Affiliation: Aspiring Shopkeeper

» Level: 5
» Energy: 22 (17+5)
» Ability: Scrappy
» Moves:
- Tackle (1)
- Growl (3)
- Defense Curl (5)
- Dizzy Punch (egg move)

» Natural Feats:
- Milk Producer: It gives over five gallons of milk daily. Its sweet milk is enjoyed by children and grown-ups alike.
- Nutritious Milk: Its milk is packed with nutrition, making it the ultimate beverage for the sick or weary.
- Motherly Instinct: If it is around babies, the milk it produces contains much more nutrition than usual.
- Scrappy: Able to hit ghost-types

» Personality:
Maryam is a kind-hearted miltank, almost always having a skip to her step and a smile on her face. She enjoys being around others and helping anyone she can, though she can be a bit gullible and easily manipulated because of this. Just pull off some puppy dog eyes and a fake cough around her, and she'll be giving you free milk for days. However, if she finds out you're lying to her, her attitude will swiftly turn sour towards you, giving you nasty glares every time she passes you, and permanently banning you from her shop. She often gets frustrated with herself because of this, and swears that she will "Never give anyone free milk ever again!", but the moment a sick pokemon comes up to her, the cycle starts all over again.

» Likes:
- All types of fruits and berries, with pecha berries being her favorite.
- Singing. She isn't good at it by any means, but she loves to sing whenever she's on the job, and is often subconsciously humming a little tone-deaf tune.
- Talking to others. Being the bit of a social butterfly she is, Maryam loves to talk to others, almost non-stop. This can be a bit bothersome though, especially when dealing with customers who just want to buy their milk and leave.

» Dislikes:
- Poison-types. Due to a rough experience as a kid, poison-types tend to freak her out a bit. Not to the point of denying them service or anything, she just really prefers not to interact with them all too much, and is often very wary whenever she is.
- People making fum of her singing. She knows she's bad at it, but will still get really flustered and upset whenever others point it out or make fun of it.
- Apologizing. It's not that she's cocky, or hates admitting that she's wrong or anything, she just really hates genuinely hurting other's feelings, and having to put into words just how sorry she is.

» History:
Maryam had a pretty average childhood, being born in Pecha Forest and raised in Grassviel Town. Maryam was an only child, and was often taken to her mom's milk shop, mostly to accompany her mom and do very small chores. One day while she was doing her usual chores, she heard a terrible shriek coming from the front of the shop. When she rushed to see what it was, she saw her mom standing needle-point, with a beedril and arbok yelling at her, telling her to "PUT THE POKE IN THE BAG!". When she was taking a bit longer than they desired, the beedril used a wicked Poison Jab on her mom, leaving her poisoned, and shoving the poke in the bag themselves, leaving swiftly after.

Maryam's mom had recovered from the wound itself, but the poison never fully left, affecting her milk supply, and eventually taking it's toll. Maryam had inherited her mom's milk shop when she passed, sprucing up the place here and there, adding a few new recipes, but for the most part keeping it the same.

» Other:
Maryam tends to shorten words a lot, usually if they end with 'ing' (somethin', helpin' ki'ens ((kittens)) ye', etc)


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PostSubject: Re: Maryam the Miltank   Thu Aug 25, 2016 5:43 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reasons:



1.) GENDER

Gender identity is fine and all, but your character seems to have pretty much no reason for identifying as agender. There's no reason for it and it doesn't seem to affect Maryam at all as a character. It's never referenced even once. Don't add something like that just to make your character "different." I would suggest just making her gender identity "female." If you want to keep it as is, think of a good reason and reflect it in the bio.

2.) AFFILIATION

Your character cannot start as a shopkeeper since you cannot apply for a shop until the character is accepted. If you plan for Maryam to be some form of saleswoman for in-character purposes rather than an official shopkeeper, you'll still have to talk about this with an admin and almost certainly pick a different term for the affiliation even if you manage to get it approved. If you want for your character to be a legitimate shopkeeper, just say that she is an aspiring shopkeeper (not currently a shopkeeper, but it's a goal for her), then sign up for a shop once the character is accepted.

3.) ENERGY

Got your numbers a bit wrong there.

4.) NATURAL FEATS

Add a feat for your chosen ability. Also, may want to mention that being around babies causes miltank to produce more nutritious milk than usual.

5.) PERSONALITY

"...she will give you one mean Dizzy Punch that'll knock you to the next town over."

Change the wording of this. Currently, it could be taken as suggestive overpowering of the character, as it is a testament that Maryam can simply knock anyone out if they upset her. I assume that's not what you meant, but still, change it for clarity's sake.

6.) HISTORY

Honestly, the history is fine. There's just a lot more you could do to elaborate on it, as it all seems a bit rushed. I'd suggest putting a bit more work into it, but if you don't want to, it's perfectly fine as is. Just a friendly recommendation.


If you have any questions or concerns, feel free to message any of the Secretaries. May it be through the Chatbox or through Private Messaging, we will tend to your concerns as soon as we can. Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.

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PostSubject: Re: Maryam the Miltank   Thu Aug 25, 2016 6:44 am

(hopefully) Fixed!

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PostSubject: Re: Maryam the Miltank   Thu Aug 25, 2016 6:56 am

Sorry, your Character Bio cannot be approved due to the following reason:



1.) NATURAL FEATS

When I said to add a feat for your chosen ability, I was talking about describing the ability, not just listing its name again.


Please fix your bio accordingly so that we may be able to approve it. Once you have completed your edits, either bump this thread or message us.

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PostSubject: Re: Maryam the Miltank   Thu Aug 25, 2016 7:17 am

Whoops! Complete brain-fart on that! fixed!

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PostSubject: Re: Maryam the Miltank   Sun Aug 28, 2016 8:03 am

Character has been approved!



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